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あなたは大学入試の要約問題の採点者です。次の【英文】を120字以内の日本語で要約した【私の答案】を、100点満点で採点してください。

配点：内容（要点）50点／構成と論理20点／表現20点／字数と形式10点

次の順番で、やさしい日本語で答えてください。
1. 各観点の得点と、その理由
2. 減点された箇所の具体的な指摘（該当部分を引用して）
3. 直した例（1つだけ）
4. 次に直すべき点を3つ

採点の注意：原文の言い回しの丸写しは減点。具体例や数字を入れすぎていたら減点。自分の意見が混ざっていたら減点。字数は制限の90〜100%が理想。

【制限字数】120

【英文】
In many workplaces, the idea of where and when to work has changed. Employees who once had to arrive at the same office at the same hour now often choose their schedules or work from home. Supporters call this flexibility one of the most important improvements in working life in recent decades.

The advantages are easy to see. Workers save time that they used to spend commuting, and they can arrange their days around family duties, health needs, or study. Companies may benefit too, because employees who feel trusted often work with greater commitment, and firms can recruit talented people who live far away or who cannot work fixed hours.

However, flexibility is not free of problems. Workers at home may feel isolated and find it harder to ask casual questions or to learn from colleagues by watching them. It can also become difficult to separate work from private life, so that some people end up working longer than before. Furthermore, not every job can be done remotely, so the benefits are often enjoyed by office workers while others, such as those who care for patients or deliver goods, are left out. This gap can create a new kind of inequality in the workplace.

These difficulties do not mean that flexibility should be abandoned. Rather, they suggest that it needs clear rules. Companies can set times when everyone is available, respect employees' right to disconnect after hours, and create chances for new staff to build relationships. Employers can also look for other kinds of flexibility, such as adjustable shifts, for those who cannot work from home.

In the end, flexible work is a tool, and its results depend on how it is used. If it is designed with fairness and human contact in mind, it can make jobs both more productive and more humane.

【私の答案】
（ここに自分の要約を貼る）

You are a strict but kind grader for university entrance exam summary tasks. Grade my summary of the passage below out of 100 points.

Scoring: Content (key points) 50 / Structure and logic 20 / Language (grammar, vocabulary, paraphrasing) 20 / Length and format 10.

Please answer in Japanese in this order:
1. Score for each category with reasons
2. Specific problems (quote the words in my summary)
3. One improved version of my summary
4. Three things to fix next time

Rules: copying whole sentences from the passage loses points. Use third-person, present tense. The ideal length is 90–110% of the target.

Target length: about 50 words

Passage:
In many workplaces, the idea of where and when to work has changed. Employees who once had to arrive at the same office at the same hour now often choose their schedules or work from home. Supporters call this flexibility one of the most important improvements in working life in recent decades.

The advantages are easy to see. Workers save time that they used to spend commuting, and they can arrange their days around family duties, health needs, or study. Companies may benefit too, because employees who feel trusted often work with greater commitment, and firms can recruit talented people who live far away or who cannot work fixed hours.

However, flexibility is not free of problems. Workers at home may feel isolated and find it harder to ask casual questions or to learn from colleagues by watching them. It can also become difficult to separate work from private life, so that some people end up working longer than before. Furthermore, not every job can be done remotely, so the benefits are often enjoyed by office workers while others, such as those who care for patients or deliver goods, are left out. This gap can create a new kind of inequality in the workplace.

These difficulties do not mean that flexibility should be abandoned. Rather, they suggest that it needs clear rules. Companies can set times when everyone is available, respect employees' right to disconnect after hours, and create chances for new staff to build relationships. Employers can also look for other kinds of flexibility, such as adjustable shifts, for those who cannot work from home.

In the end, flexible work is a tool, and its results depend on how it is used. If it is designed with fairness and human contact in mind, it can make jobs both more productive and more humane.

My summary:
(paste your summary here)