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あなたは大学入試の要約問題の採点者です。次の【英文】を120字以内の日本語で要約した【私の答案】を、100点満点で採点してください。

配点：内容（要点）50点／構成と論理20点／表現20点／字数と形式10点

次の順番で、やさしい日本語で答えてください。
1. 各観点の得点と、その理由
2. 減点された箇所の具体的な指摘（該当部分を引用して）
3. 直した例（1つだけ）
4. 次に直すべき点を3つ

採点の注意：原文の言い回しの丸写しは減点。具体例や数字を入れすぎていたら減点。自分の意見が混ざっていたら減点。字数は制限の90〜100%が理想。

【制限字数】120

【英文】
When people fail to keep a resolution, such as studying every evening or eating less sugar, they usually blame a lack of willpower. The assumption is that successful people simply have stronger minds. I would like to suggest that this explanation is misleading and even harmful.

Consider how the mind works during an ordinary day. Much of our behavior is triggered automatically by cues in the environment rather than by conscious decisions. A phone lying on the desk invites a glance; a snack in plain view invites a bite. To resist such cues repeatedly requires effort, and effort is limited, so even determined people eventually give in.

This suggests a different strategy. Instead of relying on strength of character, we can change the surroundings that shape our actions. Someone who wants to concentrate can leave the phone in another room. Someone who wants to eat better can keep healthy food where it is easy to reach. By making the desired action easy and the unwanted action inconvenient, we let the environment do the work.

Some readers may object that this approach avoids the real issue. Character, they say, is built by facing temptation, not by hiding from it, and a person who can only behave well in a carefully controlled setting is not truly disciplined. There is something in this view, since inner strength does matter in situations we cannot control.

Even so, relying on willpower alone is like trying to swim against a strong current. It is wiser to arrange conditions in advance so that good behavior requires little struggle, keeping our limited strength for moments when it is truly needed.

The lesson is encouraging. Change does not depend on being a special kind of person; it depends on designing a better setting.

【私の答案】
（ここに自分の要約を貼る）

You are a strict but kind grader for university entrance exam summary tasks. Grade my summary of the passage below out of 100 points.

Scoring: Content (key points) 50 / Structure and logic 20 / Language (grammar, vocabulary, paraphrasing) 20 / Length and format 10.

Please answer in Japanese in this order:
1. Score for each category with reasons
2. Specific problems (quote the words in my summary)
3. One improved version of my summary
4. Three things to fix next time

Rules: copying whole sentences from the passage loses points. Use third-person, present tense. The ideal length is 90–110% of the target.

Target length: about 50 words

Passage:
When people fail to keep a resolution, such as studying every evening or eating less sugar, they usually blame a lack of willpower. The assumption is that successful people simply have stronger minds. I would like to suggest that this explanation is misleading and even harmful.

Consider how the mind works during an ordinary day. Much of our behavior is triggered automatically by cues in the environment rather than by conscious decisions. A phone lying on the desk invites a glance; a snack in plain view invites a bite. To resist such cues repeatedly requires effort, and effort is limited, so even determined people eventually give in.

This suggests a different strategy. Instead of relying on strength of character, we can change the surroundings that shape our actions. Someone who wants to concentrate can leave the phone in another room. Someone who wants to eat better can keep healthy food where it is easy to reach. By making the desired action easy and the unwanted action inconvenient, we let the environment do the work.

Some readers may object that this approach avoids the real issue. Character, they say, is built by facing temptation, not by hiding from it, and a person who can only behave well in a carefully controlled setting is not truly disciplined. There is something in this view, since inner strength does matter in situations we cannot control.

Even so, relying on willpower alone is like trying to swim against a strong current. It is wiser to arrange conditions in advance so that good behavior requires little struggle, keeping our limited strength for moments when it is truly needed.

The lesson is encouraging. Change does not depend on being a special kind of person; it depends on designing a better setting.

My summary:
(paste your summary here)